Nintendao

Haiku Unchained

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A thread for poems

Original or quoted

Compose or discuss

 

Five, seven, then five.

A form we know very well.

Cast off this constraint.

 

For those times when,

Expression is more important,

Feel free to bend rules.

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Good idea, my friend.

Many haiku in the chain

wanted to break free.

 

I think we had a "Mystical poetry thread" at some point but that, too, is a chain even a mystic might want to break.  Sometimes nothing can restrain poetry except its own chosen restraints. 

 

The lifeguard on duty,
a muscular cutie,
proclaimed that he spotted a shark. 
The ocean spat out
a hurried wet crowd.

 

To rule us takes merely a lark.
Who knows if there's really a shark?..

 

 

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@Jim D. 

 

this thread might be more your alley

unlike the haiku chain 

free yourself from the uncanny valley 

spare yourself a haiku structure’s pain

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16 hours ago, Earl Grey said:

@Jim D. 

 

this thread might be more your alley

unlike the haiku chain 

free yourself from the uncanny valley 

spare yourself a haiku structure’s pain

 

Alleviate pain

By forging a wiggly chain 

More like a noodle

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2 minutes ago, Nintendao said:

 

Alleviate pain

By forging a wiggly chain 

More like a noodle

 

More like a noodle,

an expressive word doodle -

structure hard to break

 

:lol:

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Here's one for the whimsical immortal Lan Caihe (藍采和).

 

Peaceful blue orchid,
dozing half-blitzed in the snow,
where's your other shoe?

 

 

Who's your favorite Baxian (八仙)?

 

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Here I sit

same as ever

took a dump

pulled the lever

the toilet clogged

it overflowed

look out world

it’s a mother load 

 

 

Here I sit 

broken-hearted 

paid a dime

only farted

 

 

 

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On 12/14/2019 at 3:51 AM, Earl Grey said:

That was cool, huh huh

When we killed that frog huh huh

It won't croak again

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zI133jdZG4A

 

It won't croak again

Nor ever be green again

I Sit, on pad, alone

 

I don't need no 7 syllables in the middle, nor 5 at the end.   better now.

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Someday we will return to the beginning

and eat the fruits of paradise ad-lib.

And Adam will be skipping, jumping, spinning,

and Eve will turn right back into his rib.     

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Shaolin, Shaolin,

Shaolin, Shaolin,

I'm begging of you please don't take my cat. 

Shaolin, Shaolin,

Shaolin, Shaolin,

please don't take him and don't shave his head.

 

He jumps and kicks and begs for alms,

he practices his Tiger Palms,

all four of them, on anything that moves.

And I can easily understand

my cat could be a Shaolin man -- 

if not right now, in his next lifetime then.

 

Your kung fu skill's beyond compare
With jumping kicks and bright robes' flare
With weapons twirled in acrobatic spin 
Your chanting is so sweet and soft
and sounds like meows I can't pull off,   
And I cannot compete with you, Shaolin!
 
He purrs about you in his sleep
And there's nothing I can do to keep
From crying when he calls your name
Shaolin
I know that you could take my cat
Teach him kung fu and shave his head
But you don't know what he means to me
Shaolin!!  
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Just so you know

the waters a bare toe

Too much talent for me

you can now see

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