Mark Foote Posted June 22, 2011 Roar as ocean, Leaves blow aimless on the wind, Hollow, emptiness. hollow, emptiness my old friend, nothing to say laughed until I cried Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
theurgy Posted June 22, 2011 (edited) Laughed until I cried Did someone shout "Hammer time!" ??? Master's turquoise pants Edited June 22, 2011 by theurgy Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
rainbowvein Posted June 22, 2011 (edited) Laughed until I cried Did someone shout "Hammer time!" ??? Master's turquoise pants Master's turquoise pants Like a pendant on my neck Root myself to earth Edited June 22, 2011 by Rainbow_Vein Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 22, 2011 Master's turquoise pants Like a pendant on my neck Root myself to earth Root myself to earth, My gaze encompasses sky, Paradoxical. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ChiDragon Posted June 22, 2011 Paradoxical, LaoTze writing style, Specious. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 22, 2011 Paradoxical, LaoTze writing style, Specious. I'm not sure what you are doing. This is not 5-7-5 or any other rhythm I'm used to. I'm not sure what it is, or what you want people to do with it. Could we please get back to 5-7-5 or some other rhythm? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ChiDragon Posted June 22, 2011 I'm not sure what you are doing. This is not 5-7-5 or any other rhythm I'm used to. I'm not sure what it is, or what you want people to do with it. Could we please get back to 5-7-5 or some other rhythm? Go back to the #1 post of this thread and let me know if I interpreted incorrectly. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 22, 2011 Go back to the #1 post of this thread and let me know if I interpreted incorrectly. 5 syllables 7 syllables 5 syllables 5-7-5 Par a dox i cal = 5 Lao Tze writ ing style =5 spec i ous =3 Just trying to help....no smart assness intended. Please start something new and we can work it together. Peace! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ChiDragon Posted June 22, 2011 5 syllables 7 syllables 5 syllables 5-7-5 Paradoxical, LaoTze writing style, Specious. Par a dox i cal = 5 Lao Tze writ ing s ty le = 7 s pe ci ou s = 5 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 22, 2011 5 syllables 7 syllables 5 syllables 5-7-5 Paradoxical, LaoTze writing style, Specious. Par a dox i cal = 5 Lao Tze writ ing s ty le = 7 s pe ci ou s = 5 http://www.howmanysyllables.com/words/style.html http://www.howmanysyllables.com/words/specious.html please look at this website. It will breakdown words into the correct number of syllables. Maybe it's a language issue? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ChiDragon Posted June 22, 2011 "Maybe it's a language issue?" Yes, it is. Sorry, I'll no longer participate in the Hiaku Chain. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 22, 2011 "Maybe it's a language issue?" Yes, it is. Sorry, I'll no longer participate in the Hiaku Chain. ChiDragon. No offense was meant. I merely meant that perhaps English is your second language. I myself only have one, so if you speak/write more than one, I admire you. I would enjoy your participation, and would feel better if we could work this out together without bad feelings. We all have much to learn from one another. I apologize if I offended you. Please continue the Haiku. Peace! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
C T Posted June 22, 2011 Paradoxical, LaoTze writing style, Specious. specious reasons i know not the way of Dao and Dao knows me not... ...and Dao knows me not scrambled eggs with beans on toast throw Dao to the wind... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 22, 2011 specious reasons i know not the way of Dao and Dao knows me not... ...and Dao knows me not scrambled eggs with beans on toast throw Dao to the wind... Throw Dao to the wind... Everywhere all at one time, Tears in the ocean. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ChiDragon Posted June 22, 2011 ChiDragon. No offense was meant. I merely meant that perhaps English is your second language. I myself only have one, so if you speak/write more than one, I admire you. I would enjoy your participation, and would feel better if we could work this out together without bad feelings. We all have much to learn from one another. I apologize if I offended you. Please continue the Haiku. Peace! strawdog65... No offense. I am just used to the one syllable characters. You see, any sound is a syllable to me. It would be too difficult for me to deal will the Kaiku. Anyway, thank you for your basic understanding.... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 23, 2011 strawdog65... No offense. I am just used to the one syllable characters. You see, any sound is a syllable to me. It would be too difficult for me to deal will the Kaiku. Anyway, thank you for your basic understanding.... You are most gracious, Gentleman and a scholar, Open heart and mind. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
C T Posted June 23, 2011 You are most gracious, Gentleman and a scholar, Open heart and mind. tears in the ocean storm brewing in a tea cup you are most gracious... you are most gracious gentleman and a scholar open heart and mind... open heart and mind empty pockets each pay day nothing to cling to... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 23, 2011 tears in the ocean storm brewing in a tea cup you are most gracious... you are most gracious gentleman and a scholar open heart and mind... open heart and mind empty pockets each pay day nothing to cling to... Nothing to cling to... Just the spaces in-between, Day, breaks the stillness. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Harmonious Emptiness Posted June 23, 2011 strawdog65... No offense. I am just used to the one syllable characters. You see, any sound is a syllable to me. It would be too difficult for me to deal will the Kaiku. Anyway, thank you for your basic understanding.... For English haiku you have to say the word fast and then divide it into BEATS rather than syllables. There's a bit of flexibility to it since you can even count "learned" as 1 beat if you say it like that (learnt); otherwise learrrrn D works as 2 beats. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 23, 2011 Nothing to cling to... Just the spaces in-between, Day, breaks the stillness. How sad bumping my own last Haiku... Won't someone come play with me? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
rainbowvein Posted June 23, 2011 (edited) On 6/22/2011 at 8:15 PM, strawdog65 said: Nothing to cling to... Just the spaces in-between, Day, breaks the stillness. Daybreaks, the still. Ness. Lochness. Lakes and rivers flow. Creatures dis. Covered. Edited July 14, 2017 by rainbowvein Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Harmonious Emptiness Posted June 23, 2011 (edited) Day breaks the stillness Wet weather this afternoon Receive the blessing edit: posted at the same time... didn't mean to skip you... Edited June 23, 2011 by Harmonious Emptiness Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ChiDragon Posted June 23, 2011 Receive the blessing Birds sing on the willow tree Given liveliness Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
strawdog65 Posted June 23, 2011 Receive the blessing Birds sing on the willow tree Given liveliness Hi ChiDragon! Given liveliness, Blades of grass cover the field, Floating Bumble Bee. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
C T Posted June 23, 2011 Hi ChiDragon! Given liveliness, Blades of grass cover the field, Floating Bumble Bee. floating Bumble Bee stings sweet humming bird's bottom Nature's wonderment... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
