DalTheJigsaw123 Posted January 20, 2013 Unclouded Light First Creativity, stemmed to give me legs, Emitted me a brain to react to enrapture I desired, a pen, and some finger to hold upon the almighty blade I prescribed to give it meaning, But changed the focal point, not sure of the outcome Stultification, confidence to be better than myself, I continued to write, Away from the wretchedness, I bonded my hands to my eyes, as to not see, but to feel the Pain of poverty, slavery, and emotional abuse from a father who does not provide LOVE To children of whom his seed spelled upon the awaking body of a beautiful woman gloomed and Doomed by ties within the mental instability of her mind... Second The ceremony of confusion awoke her from the slums of passion Needless to say, her outermost cries bewildered her into the night Encompassing for a better need to painfully pigment rays of light, Where darkness melted Onto oceans of despair Falling flat with stigmas all throughout her biological structure She felt uttermost fear of terror His seeds of slippery magicians confronted her with barricades of nowhere to go And nowhere to run However, she remained optimistic in the mastery of her own solidifying body Thus, she adjudicated to her own trial to bring an end to carrying another youngster For a man who did not know LOVE... Termination of induced panic stroke her apoplexy in her psyche Slowly loosing oxygen to all her elements of her consciousness Third There she lay, lapsed without judgment or verdict Alone, painfully free from the reproducible aggressions and assaults Upon her weak rickety characteristical strength and vitality With a twinkle in her eye of exemption... More At:http://www.leonbasin.weebly.com 5 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sanzon Posted January 20, 2013 (edited) Double post. Sorry. Please delete. Edited January 20, 2013 by Sanzon Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
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Sanzon Posted January 20, 2013 Hey LeonBasin, Â Deep and heavy topics being explored here. Thank you for your courage to share. These really feel to me like the foundation to a larger story, one that encompasses whole areas of what it is to be human. Not all beings were born into privilege & comfort. Many great people have arisen from such circumstances. I have not yet read material from your link, but would encourage you to develop these themes. What came out of this beginning? What challenges & personal transitions did the protagonist find? Was there any resolution, any redemption? Â Again, Thank you for your courage. Â Namaste. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
DalTheJigsaw123 Posted January 20, 2013 Hey LeonBasin, Â Deep and heavy topics being explored here. Thank you for your courage to share. These really feel to me like the foundation to a larger story, one that encompasses whole areas of what it is to be human. Not all beings were born into privilege & comfort. Many great people have arisen from such circumstances. I have not yet read material from your link, but would encourage you to develop these themes. What came out of this beginning? What challenges & personal transitions did the protagonist find? Was there any resolution, any redemption? Â Again, Thank you for your courage. Â Namaste. Thank you so much for reading! I will see if I can answer those questions soon. But, in the meantime...Please check out the link at the bottom of the writing, I have a few books I have published and some more of my writings. I also try and keep a Blog. Can you also pass the link around with your friends?? Â Thank You, Leon Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
